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Grip my neck tight and don’t let it go.
      Forgetting to let me breathe.

So I can taste blood, as I bite my lip.

Today is the day I please him.
With my innocent body.
As
    you
      rip
        apart
          my
            soul

“Admit you like it”
Rip my heart out, and drink the remains.

Then chain me to the bed,
    a neck with scars.

“Oh my oh my, you've been such a naughty girl”
Pitied by the daytime, it’s when vampires like you sleep.

“Oh my oh my, you've been such a naughty girl”
I just want to rip out your wicked heart.

Please forgive these tears running down my cheeks,
I swear I’ll devoid myself of all emotion.
Ah, I will moan when you command.
Listening to every will.


“I love you”
It hurts so much, the whips and chains.
I hate being tied down like this.


“I love you too.”
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SakuraZara Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
This made me cry- so sad and beautiful, and it shows how abusive relationships really are.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2014  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you so much! I really am so happy that I evoked an emotion within you, even if it was a sad one. This poem really has been an either love or hate with people, and I'm happy you like it. Have a beautiful and amazing day!
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arualcat Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013
I really like this poem :) It is hard, direct and beautiful.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you!! :D
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Laur720 Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
featured here [link]
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
<3
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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FINALLY I AM RESPONDING!
You are simply amazing, don't ever stop writing!! And I love the visuals on this one too, they add a lot to the piece. WONDERFUL!
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
DWAA Thanks
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FaerieChozen Featured By Owner Mar 1, 2013
I just want to say I loved this poem. Also, poetry is one of the most beautiful types of art to me because not only does the artist get to express their art but the reader also can not help but to interpret in whatever way it hits home to them. I, when reading this, did not conclude that it was about a physically abusive relationship or that it glorified any type of relationship. I identified with because, to my mind, it was reminiscent of a relationship that was emotionally and spiritually abusive. The physical descriptions to me were very sexual and seemed as if, like KariTBB suggested, the relationship had aspects of BDSM that the subject did not enjoy but participated in due to insecurities and the controlling nature of the relationship. Regardless, that is MY interpretation as the reader and says nothing about the artist and everything about me. Zaiav... you are an amazing poet and I look forward to reading many more of your works. If you are creating such strong emotions in readers (regardless of if they try to say otherwise... if they felt the need to comment and "chastise" you then you created a strong reaction) you are doing something oh so very right!!!! Have a wonderful weekend!
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you so much. I mean, seriously thank you with all my heart.
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DoAnAileronRoll Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Your literature has just been featured in an article of the dA Gazette! [link]
Great work on it!
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks~
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DoAnAileronRoll Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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RandomCorporation Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Whoooaaa.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks!
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RebeccaAH Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i think its beautiful ^^
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Awe, :heart: :huggle: :icongwompplz:
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BronyBeforePony Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
relationships are sick in general...
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
D:
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mizzme123smile Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
Thats really good!
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you so much!
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mizzme123smile Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013
Welcome!:)
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HikariShun Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
That was really good keep it up
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
THANK YOU!!! :D
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HikariShun Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
your welcome it was really good
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks a ton!
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HikariShun Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013
you are very welcome
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Hearts-Are-Cold Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Student General Artist
It seems like you're trying to glorify abusive relationships.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
How so? >,<
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ValhallaStarfire Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
Actually, I see it as xir way of bringing to light the mentality that many people trapped on the passive end of abuse relationships think. Truth is, this is a fairly common state of mind that abuse victims have. It's a harsh truth, and the victim embodies it in a beautifully twisted way.
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Hearts-Are-Cold Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Student General Artist
As someone who grew up in a household where physical abuse was the norm, I don't think this is at all representative of the way it is. I think it's representative of the way people who've never experienced it want to think it's like.

I don't think that when my mother was five months pregnant and being punched in the stomach by my last stepfather that she was thinking anything like what this person has written. It's like she decided to write this after watching a shitty lifetime movie.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
I am very sorry that you had to go through such a horrid thing, but everyone can interpret things differently. While you may see it as some 'shitty lifetime movie' others may find it to be moving.
Please don't be offended, it was not my intention to offend anyone.
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Hearts-Are-Cold Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Student General Artist
I think I'm mostly just bothered because it perpetuates the reasoning that all women in abusive relationships could easily get out of it. It doesn't give any grounding for why she's there or can't leave, she's just there to be there.

I mean, even some kind of indication that he was once a different person that she truly loves, or that she feels like she couldn't leave or couldn't do better, or couldn't make it on her own would have made this more grounded in reality. The lack of a backstory makes things open for a lot of interpretation, which in poetry, as I'm sure you know, is a double-edged sword.

It creates a more polarized response, and people like me, whose stories are wildly different from the created scenario, are bound to be bothered because it feels like the things we've experienced are being trivialized.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Well that's your option. Although I completely disagree with it.
I didn't mean any harm in writing this truly, it was simply what I thought words would go good tougether. But hey, I am happy I angered you. Yes, it's silly. But hell I caused emotion.
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Hearts-Are-Cold Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Student General Artist
I'm not angered at all, I'm just slightly bothered, it's not an emotion so much as an empty response. I'm actually more bugged that you are completely disregarding any structured advice that I'm giving you.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Feb 17, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Probably because so many other people enjoyed the poem, and even if its just a few. I enjoy those people's options, and agree with them. Not to say I didn't listen to yours. But I disagree with it. Also, it is my poem. I can do whatever I want with it.
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KariTBB Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Student General Artist
I think you misunderstood the poem a little.

What you and your mother, and I feel deeply sorry that you had to go through this, experienced was pure brutal abuse. It's just violence.... out of hatred probably, maybe out of frustration or anything.

This poem is about sexual dominance. When your stepfather hit your mother, he didn't desire her, did he? He just wanted to injure her.
BSDM is different from abuse, I think that's what a lot of people who don't know BSDM don't know. NO woman, whether she likes BSDM or not, wants to be truly abused. As a play yes, but never for real.
Sexual playing is done with a partner you love and whom you truly trust. You wouldn't let anyone willingly hurt you if you can not be sure that this person would stop whenever you demand it.

Now as for this very poem, I see it being about a woman who does BSDM with her partner but doesn't enjoy it. Things like "ripping a soul apart" is not typical of sexual playing, and the "hate being tied down" illustrates aversion, too. If a woman likes BSDM, she does enjoy being tied, even if she will fight it to keep things exciting.

To me, this poem shows a woman that plays along with her boyfriend's BSDM fantasies even though she doesn't like it. A woman who participates only because she loves her man, or maybe because she thinks he wouldn't love her anymore if she doesn't share his fantasies.

What I'm trying to say with all this: Don't feel bad because of this poem. No person in their right mind would accept or tolerate an abusive relationship. And no one thinks that a woman shrugs it off or that she would want to be treated like that. What you described below, the fear, that is how abused woman feel, and I think anyone knows that.

Do you happen to know "Keep moving" by Savage Garden? Or "Concrete Angel" by Martina McBride? These are songs that are about real abuse. The world does know about the tragedy abuse is. And though I often lose faith in humanity, that's one of the things that even today's society openly despises and fights against.

I hope you will have a better way in front of you than the one you came.
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Hearts-Are-Cold Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Student General Artist
That's an interesting interpretation, and to be honest, this is more along the lines of how it came across to me, which was mostly why I'm bothered by the choice to title it as being 'Abusive' when it oversimplifies and mislabels the issue.
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Cropcircledesigner Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
I got the impression the writer was just mixing two things up and ending in a really sickening place where they write about actual abuse in a fetishy way, the way it starts makes it seem like she asks ("Grip my neck...") but then she's a victim. Which I don't even want to analyze further because gah, I think I prefer your interpretation xD
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you for your interpretation, of my poem. It moves me alot to know that you came up with your own conclusion. It was beautiful one, and I thank you again for taking the time to read the poem.
Have a beautiful day!
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ValhallaStarfire Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013
Luckily for the both of us, I wouldn't dare argue with someone who was unfortunate enough to have closer experience to a situation than I have. I am sorry you had to bring such information up. v_v *hugs*
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forbravery Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2013  Student Writer
I disagree, I thought it was repulsive and submissive at the same time.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you and I hope you enjoyed the poem~
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forbravery Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Student Writer
It was emotionally painful to read, not because it was bad, but because it was so private and it touched sensitive topics without a gentle hand. It was raw, felt like you were talking about a rape.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks!
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forbravery Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2013  Student Writer
It was great, it's always great to have that kind of impact on someone.
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Hearts-Are-Cold Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2013  Student General Artist
It didn't come across that way to me. Submissive, sure. But it was more like, "Oh, he loves me and just doesn't show it like most people. He's so alternative. He ties me up and chokes me sometimes, but he loves me and I love him too. Soooo abusive."

I can say from experience it's not like that. It's more like, "I can't afford to take care of two kids on my own, I'm scared that if I try to leave he'll try to kill me or he'll hurt my kids. I'm scared and alone, and I have to call the cops on a weekly basis because he's always getting drunk. He even beat me and choked me unconscious when I was pregnant with his own child. The last time I tried to leave he threatened me and himself with a gun. I don't love him and I can't escape him."
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forbravery Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2013  Student Writer
I think you are right about that, the poem barely scratches the surface of abusive relationships, but I think that we could all agree that there are different levels of abusive relationships. The one described here feels so sexual, it feels like a rape where the victim isn't bothering to fight back. It doesn't feel like anything emotionally deeper than physical abuse, because you are right, the other emotional threats aren't present.
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