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    His hateful eyes.
    Which killed my parents.
    That which burned my arms.
    With sinful marks.
    His loving eyes.
    Which killed my parents.
    That kissed my arms.
    With loving hearts.


This all happened, faster then I imagined.

Here I am staring at a murder, falling in love.


    I'll kill for you, sweetie. Let's end the world together.
    Won't it be fun?
    Our killing spree?

    Watch us world! As our murders show on tv, and run by your eyes!

    WATCH US KILL!
    Enjoy this!
    Watch…him…die…
    I never could forgive such a disgusting man.
      Watch me get locked up.
        His dead eyes.
        Which killed my parents.
        That kissed and burned my arms.
        With sinful and loving marks.
This is an entry for :iconlive-love-write: I loved this prompt!
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Entering another contest, because I didn't win the last one.. The emotion in this is betrayal.
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Critique by WarriorCatsLover14 May 18, 2012, 2:18:13 PM
This is amazing. Like, seriously, wow! Just wow! I'm amazed :D I love how you used the different font for different paragraphs and such. I also like how the character fell in love with the person who killed his/her(I think its a her?) parents, but she also hated him/her. :3 I think it is cute.
Anyway, this poem is one of the best I've seen on here. It is very EPICAL and AWESOME. I wish I had your talent DX Lolz.
So yeah, it was very original and interesting. Also, very different and a very good idea. Great job and please keep on writing poetry like this!
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RollingTomorrow Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012   General Artist
Thank you for participating in our prompt at #Live-Love-Write! :iconlachoirplz:

This really was an intriguing piece! The contrasting outlooks and formatting you used really made it fascinating.

Good work!


*TheFinalHikari
Founder of #Writers--club, #LandoftheSky, and #Live-Love-Write
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
THANKS! :heart:
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EstrangeloEdessa Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really love the way you use formatting. It's fantastic, the way that it shows her differing opinions, her changes in mood. Good job.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you!
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IceQueenAzure Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations! Your piece will be placed in the featured folder for :iconartist-platform: for this month. It will be posted on June 1st!
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Zaiav Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
:jawdrop: OH MY GOSH! THANK YOU!!! THANK YOU!! THANK YOU!!
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IceQueenAzure Featured By Owner May 30, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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Social-Insomnia Featured By Owner May 23, 2012
very giddy. I love your style of writing.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner May 24, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you very much!
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bear48 Featured By Owner May 20, 2012  Professional
:wow: WOW instance

nicely done
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Zaiav Featured By Owner May 20, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you very much!
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FukurouKimihiro Featured By Owner May 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome!
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Zaiav Featured By Owner May 20, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks!
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FukurouKimihiro Featured By Owner May 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome!
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Adonael Featured By Owner May 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Kind of reminds me of Bonnie and Clyde, except it's a lot more sinister and twisted. Short, sharp and I really enjoyed reading it :)
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Zaiav Featured By Owner May 20, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you so much! Now that I think about it, it really does remind me of that too! :D THANKS! :D
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Adonael Featured By Owner May 23, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
It was uncanny xD

No worries :)
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TheCorpseHasPetals Featured By Owner May 19, 2012  Student General Artist
First I would like to point out the it is "disgusting". But this was pretty epic. It was cool how you used the different thoughts on the murdurer that the girl/guy fell in love with.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner May 19, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Yeaahh my spelling sucks! XD XD But thank you! :D
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TheCorpseHasPetals Featured By Owner May 19, 2012  Student General Artist
You are welcome.
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Android3000 Featured By Owner May 18, 2012  Hobbyist
nice
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Zaiav Featured By Owner May 18, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks
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autumnlit Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
This reminds me of two things. One mostly, the movie based on the true story of a teen who convinced a girl he was a real vamp and to run away with him. He killed her parents without her knowing and ran off. They were eventually caught as well. I can't remember the name. And two, it also partly reminds me of the movie Heathers. ^^ hehehe
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Zaiav Featured By Owner May 18, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I've never seen either..Sorry. But the fact that I revoke a memory from something else brings me joy!!! :la: Thanks~
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autumnlit Featured By Owner May 18, 2012
haha I'm sorry! I know that's like the second time I've done that to you. Third if you count that this one reminded me of two movies. But I think it's really cool! I get inspired by other art, like a movie might inspire me to write a poem about it.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner May 19, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
You know what? It makes my day when you do! It's ok, saying it's like something else encourages me more~ So thank you!
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autumnlit Featured By Owner May 19, 2012
Oh good! You're welcome. ^^
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BLEACH-IT-WHITE Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, that was twisted. Interesting psychological state.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner May 18, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
That's what I was going for! Thanks! :D
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Kin-slayer-gorth Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Hobbyist Interface Designer
I love this
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Zaiav Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks!
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Kin-slayer-gorth Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Hobbyist Interface Designer
your very welcome
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Andromada-Sama Featured By Owner May 17, 2012
amazing! :D
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Zaiav Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks!!! I'm hoping to win!
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zelaeii Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Amazing, as always ^^
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Zaiav Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thankies!
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AmeliadosSantos Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I think you are going to win this contest. This is FREAKING AWESOME!!
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Zaiav Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you so much! I hope!
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AmeliadosSantos Featured By Owner May 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome! :aww:
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