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You’ll never be good enough to beat that person in video games.
Nor that online player who claims they're the best.

You’ll never be good enough to earn that pay raise at work.
Nor become employee of the month.

You’ll never be good enough to be the strongest and smartest in class.
Nor get the best grades.

You’ll never be good enough to be a model.
Nor have the body you've always wanted.

You’ll never be good enough to walk away from that fight.
Nor be able to fight back.

You’ll never be good enough to hold back your emotions.
Nor always be the best friend.

You’ll never be good enough to always do the right thing.
Nor make the right choices.

You’ll never be good enough to make that person love you.
Nor always be loved.

You’ll never be good enough to make it somewhere.
Nor ever be noticed.

But you can damn well try.
And doesn't trying really count?
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StudioIJB Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2013
Nicely written...that ending line keeps the inspiration part without the ''sap'' :D
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Awe, thanks! That actually means alot, I always fear I write too 'sappy' but I guess I didn't! YAAY!
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Snoweyes1256 Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2013
wow.... this is really enlightening. thanks, i needed this

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Zaiav Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks a ton! I'm so surprised people actually liked this poem! I was afraid everyone would hate it!
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theolivethief14 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes, in fact. :aww:
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks! ^-^
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theolivethief14 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problemo~ c:
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JoyfullDarkness Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Even though you may not care, especially since i never communicate with you, don't stop posting things like this. These feelings are what i NEED to see and know are still out there, that i am not alone, that the world still has hope.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
No! I do care, I love to hear your feedback.
Although my replys may be late (because I fail at life sometimes) it's amazing that people actually gain a response from my work. I LOVE HEARING WHAT YOU THINK! SO DON'T BE AFRAID TO SAY STUFF!
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JoyfullDarkness Featured By Owner Jul 11, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ok then good :D i shall continue hen :)
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LadyFlux Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
TRUTH <3
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks! :D
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LadyFlux Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
you're welcome!!
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The-Lost-Hope Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Nice use of repeating lines, I like how at the end you say that you can try anyway. And that's what is important.
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:iconzaiav:
Zaiav Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Yep!
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The-Lost-Hope Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Student General Artist
:clap:
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Student Artist
awesome ^_^
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks!
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Student Artist
your welcome^-^
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LeoDormouse Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013
... I feel really depressed now.
I was brought up convinced that you can have or do whatever you want if you really want it.
Meaning faith in yourself and very, very hard work if needed.
Doesn't work for love, of course(even if...), but for everything else, pretty much.
And it isn't sane, to want something to that point. People that are not as good as they'd like to be are either not putting enough effort in it, either should start to be happy with what they got...

So I really don't see the point of this poem...
Because you're saying trying is enough... The whole thing is not about trying, it's about having achievable goals and successing.

Please don't hate, I'm open to any discussion about this =D
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Hmm...
Well I understand what you're saying.
I guess what I was going for is trying helps alot! That without trying where would we be? And that sometimes you'll fail. But you can't stop trying...
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LeoDormouse Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2013
Actually, I was in a bad mood when I wrote that..
I understand what you mean, but I feel it in a pessimist way, because "it's win or lose not how you play the game" that counts in the end, most of the time, so it feels like a lie to me, what you wrote..
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Ah, I understand. Although I disagree, I understand! ^-^
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LeoDormouse Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013
Good ^o^

(I don't care if you agree as long as you get my point of view ;) )
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EddieVancil Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013
I enjoy the excellent use of 'never' and 'nor' in this poem. Also it is very uplifting.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanks! That's what I was going for!
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zelaeii Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Trying is all that matters!

You manage to capture so much of your theme in your poems! The repetition is perfect for the 'keep trying' theme. You are just amazing! Keep it up! :la:
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thanksss!
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Loxome Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Student General Artist
DAMN RIGHT YOU BETTER TRY. IT'S THE EFFORT THAT COUNTS, NO MATTER HOW MUCH WE WANT TO BE PERFECT.
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
YEAH! TRYING HARD COUNTS!
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Camilia-Chan Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's all about trying again if the first time isn't perfect. Well done with this poem!
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Thank you so much!
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Camilia-Chan Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome! :)
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CrystalChell Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Damn right I can try!
Love. It!
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Zaiav Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
:D Thanks!
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CrystalChell Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Anytime ^^
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